Sweet New Browns Website

[jblackmon81]

Thanks Fooleze. Techincally our site isnt released until February 1, so anything you guys see is just in the developmental stage.

Will fix the errors in spelling and posting.

[jblackmon81]

Thanks for all the comments

[damajuki]

J, I'm going to be brutally honest and it's going to read like I'm being a jerk but I don't intend that at all. I have done major editing of written work meant for publication and my philosophy to writers is "better you hear it from me because others are going to say/think it anyway". So please take this as constructive criticism.

First, your design is nice and the layout is easy on the eyes and easy to navigate. The ads in the right banner are a bit too large for my tastes but I can understand paying the bills. No major issues there.

But the content is a real problem for you right now. The writing is just not at an acceptable level for any sort of publication. I respect the fact you are using by-lines and I applaud Jeremy for putting his name on his work but this writing is not even high school level and that reflects on Jeremy (if that's not you) and you (if you are the owner and therefore publisher of the site). You can't expect to generate any sort of credibility or repeat readership with content that is sub-standard.

The good news is that there is one simple fix for content issues: edit, edit and edit some more. Get three people you trust to read each post and then you approve the final copy. Don't publish anything that doesn't pass your standards. And if this is your current standard, elevate it.

Finally, keep in mind that the internet knows no age; there is only good, well-written, interesting content and poorly written, uninteresting content. Online, what you see is what you get. So when I say "not high school level", that is not meant as an insult to you or people in high school; I have no idea how old you are and I honestly don't care. I only want to see good, interesting content or I will go somewhere where I find that content (like here and clevelandfrowns.com, for two top examples in this genre).

So when I say "high school level", it is only to draw a comparison to a written standard that is roughly understandable for everyone. You can aim lower or higher than that for your site but you should probably consider what kind of audience you are trying to attract and direct the content at them.

Because, again, just trying to be constructively honest here, I'm not going to read sentences like: "From the vibes that were getting recieved, I can only assume the man they bring in will call the plays over Shumur. But will he?" and come back to your site again for Browns analysis when I can just come to this very forum.

If you can see what's wrong with publishing those two sentences and get it fixed by February 1, there is hope for your site.

[Tobalaz]

I just started using Waterfox, a pure 64 bit version of Firefox, and it ruins through your page just fine.
If anyone is interested in testing their web pages with it, you can find it at http://waterfoxproject.org/

[jblackmon81]

Yep, that would be me... I will try to take longer on my posts but I don't really think the other articles were that bad.

[damajuki]

Originally Posted by jblackmon81

Yep, that would be me... I will try to take longer on my posts but I don't really think the other articles were that bad.

J, good for you for having the guts and passion to produce that site. That is no small thing and I respect your efforts tremendously. Becoming a regular poster on this forum will also help you in terms of your writing skills and honing your opinions. I've noted your work here and hope you keep it up; posting on a board like this that is full of intelligent posters who write really well is a great way to improve your writing/posting ability quickly.

I sincerely hope you took my words at face value and know that they were intended to help you understand how people will see -- and judge -- you and your work. Remember: you invited members and visitors of this forum to look at your site. That invitation invites not only response but criticism. So far, you are handling it well. Good for you.

Finally, to reiterate a key point, age doesn't matter where words are concerned but I suspect you are a young guy. Don't feel the need to confirm that to me or anyone else, nor apologize for it. Work on your thoughts and your ability to deliver those thoughts in a clear, concise and powerful manner and respect will follow.